Changes in my hometown
时间: 2021-10-30 作者:YHJ 阅读次数: 72五(3)班 冯 艺
My hometown was very poor 20 years ago. People there weren’t very happy but now life is very fast. The people live happily.
20 years ago, the children there must walk to school and there were a few bicycles for some children. But now, there are a lot of bicycles, cars, taxis and ferries, too. Children can go to school by many kinds of traffics.
I heard that there were not many phones 20 years ago. The phone was not so good and it was very expensive, too. But now, there are many kinds of phones and it has many kinds of functions. It can surf the Internet, check some information and play interesting games. The life is very convenient now.
Wow! Our hometown becomes a modern city now! I like it very much. Do you like your hometown?
2 中文说明:
家乡的变化
二十年前,我的家乡很贫穷。居住在那里的人们不是很幸福,但现在人们的生活节奏变快了,人们的生活也变得幸福了。
20年前,那里的小孩必须走路上学,只有少数学生有自行车。但是现在有很多自行车、小汽车、的士和渡船。小孩可以选择很多不同种类的交通工具上学。
我听说20年前电话还没有那么普遍。那时的手机不是很好但是却很贵。现在我们有各式各样的手机而且还有很多功能。它可以上网,搜索资料和玩有趣的游戏。现在的生活变得非常便捷。
哇!我的家乡现在变成一个现代化的城市了。我非常喜欢它。你喜欢你自己的家乡吗?
3 教师点评:
本文条理清晰,语言衔接流畅,句式多样化,如:If 句型、there be 句型、排比句。作为五年级学生,能够自由的运用当前学习的句型单词写文段,并且可以运用长句去表达。清楚描述了家乡20年前与现在的变化。文段主要列举了交通与通讯方面的变化。形成一个对比,强调了主题“change”。在字里行间可以看出小作者对自己家乡改变的自豪与喜爱之情。